Some of the dialog is repetitive.Ī big missed opportunity is the confrontation scene with Cynthia and Grievous. Luckily there are a lot of easy cuts to make like getting in and out of scenes quicker or merging scenes. I played with the margins and changed the font to courier and it’s easily 200 pages. The biggest issue is that it’s really long. The plot in the first half is solid but it gets muddled in the third act where it most resembles the original film (which says more about the original than your writing). The themes are clear (liked the nod to Revan) and the politics are simpler than in the original films. I liked his scene with the council genuinely did not see that move coming. Having Shmi be a mother to a bunch of orphans gives her a solid reason to stay behind. Ani throwing the race was a good character introduction. You certainly made a lot of fundamental changes but I think most of them work. This was an interesting take on the prequels. ||| Join our Discord! ||| Question? Check our FAQ ||| /r/StarWarsAhsoka ||| Upcoming SW Media ||| Please note that even if formatted correctly, spoilers are only allowed in threads marked If you want to make a spoiler all you gotta do is put ">!" in front of and "!!Many Bothans died.!< List includes movies, tv-shows and games. Mods have the final say.įrequently Asked Questions Come chat with us Join our Discord!Ĭlick here to contact the Discord moderators directly Upcoming SW Media
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